FAMILY WHO HIDES RUNAWAY PRIEST SPOTTED!
Breaking news has just occurred here in Mexico! Despite supposed erroneous rumors of priests hiding from the government with selective families, I have actually spotted one! And you will be shocked to see where his true loyalty lies.....
Captain Fellows!
Yes, it's confirmed! One of the leading men of Mexico's community has officially been spotted hiding a priest in his house! This was seen at approximately 5:00 p.m. this evening when the Captain was questioned by the chief Lieutenant, who I previously interviewed. Neighbors said that Fellows spoke briefly with the Lieutenant in a cold and absent manner only in his doorway. The Lieutenant was speculated to have left approximately ten minutes later. Fellows was heard bellowing in his house minutes after the Lieutenant left, obviously upset about whatever had been said between the two men. It is unclear who exactly Fellows was screaming at, but later that night his daughter Cora was seen taking a plate of food and blankets to the barn behind their house. Neither Captain Fellows nor his daughter had any comment on the matter.
The clear-cut facts have been laid on the table and the decision of where you think Fellow's family's loyalty lies is up to you. Do you think he's hiding something?
This is very descriptive and well written, bethany! The main thing I noticed was that this was written as if it were for a newspaper. Instead try making it as if it were for your own personal journal. One other suggestion would be not to use as many exclamation points, they're kind of overwhelming.
ReplyDeleteGreat JOb! This is well written and informative. I like how you emphasized the scandel behind hiding a priest and also how you ended the blof with a question, it forces the reader to think of a response. You might want to make it a tiny bit longer but other then that it was very well done. :D
ReplyDeleteBethany, Great tone in your blog. Maybe you have a future as a newspaper or even tv reporter!
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